They all seemed just the same to me
They looked so alike you see
Yet some were sweet,
While others sour,
The way they treated each other
Differing in every way.
Respect was absent for some
Yet present for the others.
Some, like me at first,
Judged everyone else
By their cover.
Yet some unique souls
Watched the person inside
Before they passed their judgement.
They led the way, a shining example
Of how accepting we could be.
Trying to teach by example,
This important lesson to learn.
ok, so this rambles, and I didn't really know where to cut it off. any thoughts? I am still kind of working on the idea, but I think I could get somewhere with this.
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It has some rhyming in there, not exact rhymes, but rhyming. Was that purposeful? It's kinda catchy.
Also, some of the parts broke the flow, such as the lines:
"They looked so alike you see
Yet some were sweet,
While others sour,
The way they treated each other
Differing in every way."
It broke the flow in the last two lines.
Other than that, the poem is really good! :D I like the emotions and the concept you brought into the piece. Good job :D
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